I would read your book! There’s no way it’s trash. And I love the elaborated explanation of the job loss. It definitely helps understand what the character is feeling.
Good work. Showing vs telling is an interesting balancing act. I always ask myself if I want the reader to determine the situation for themselves or if they just need the facts. If I can express it efficiently without qualifying adjectives, I'll tell it. But if I want the reader to feel the scene (as in your example) or to draw conclusions, I will always show.. But showing takes 3 paragraphs vs one sentence, and therein lies the rub. Brava.
Way to go, Barb! To decide that this book is worth your time and energy, and to stick with it. I really enjoyed seeing this behind the scenes revision.
I would read your book! There’s no way it’s trash. And I love the elaborated explanation of the job loss. It definitely helps understand what the character is feeling.
Thanks so much, Jude!
Good work. Showing vs telling is an interesting balancing act. I always ask myself if I want the reader to determine the situation for themselves or if they just need the facts. If I can express it efficiently without qualifying adjectives, I'll tell it. But if I want the reader to feel the scene (as in your example) or to draw conclusions, I will always show.. But showing takes 3 paragraphs vs one sentence, and therein lies the rub. Brava.
Thank you!
This really resonates with me. I look forward to hearing more about this and will have to consider working on this myself.
The book helped a LOT.
Way to go, Barb! To decide that this book is worth your time and energy, and to stick with it. I really enjoyed seeing this behind the scenes revision.
Thanks, Maria!